shaun i lost you from then you need
nicole diction missing some of texts - missed that scene completely
bit messy going on and off; a more interesting way to swap scenes?
catia little overacting...
go and see waht i can do catia, what about?
blade phonecall - more interesting way to do it? can we hear it through someone else's phone?
nicole, marigold - try different characterisation - have seen you do this before.
shaun diction - i missed that text again. these scenes interesting but need something. change midway?
sophie good selling scene - but polish accent ok?
hospital scene? messy staging. trio needs to be more truthful less sketch show like?
paige - lovely image of hanging socks? what else will they do? where do you hang them? what do they look like by the end. good pagie sustained but losing some words
i need to check facebook? too cheap a gag, not sure. is there someting even more advanced?
George did we see you put stash in sock? do we then anticipate the confusion?
gwen, who are you? careful not to mock the homeless. are you maybe someone more well off?
alex & nicole, ca we see alex?
nicole, same for child, can you make it less funny but more moving?
Have you all seen the clocktower in brighton? some link to make with it?
did alex say patients? are we the audience patients?
idea; do all audience pitch in to see how htey could make the debt together?
sorry missed the choice alex putting to us.. how do we remove the debt?
how did marigold lose snuggles?
at the moment wanting something meatier about debt. just a scene to make it more global?
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