Feedback peter mayo 21/5

• is there a preshow bit? what mood will you put audience in before show starts? any thoughts you want them to have?
• antonio diction much improved but more more clarity..
• where are you? can you make it clearer?
• is he annoying you from the beginning samantha? when you propose not sure you would want to from what we have seen. 
• does it need to be a little more seductive and light hearted given what she wants to happen?
• lovely pauses; maybe space for a couple of longer silences layered with feeling?
• is samantha not nervous about this at all? or playing at a more relaxed experienced woman?
• antonio to audience, you really need to change where you are to go with how well you change the mood and delivery. 
• relax your shoulders antonio when speaking to audience. will you address everyone?
• would be nice for you antonio to be much more relaxed with us so bigger contrast.
• missed the who cheated on his wife bit. can it be made clearer?
• where are we now? 
• so far, no strong visual moments without text.
• a lot of text to follow; can you really slow down some bits and speed up others?
• where are we now? peter come back inside? using the small bar at the back?
• where are the swingers? is it us the audience?
• Fetishists pronounciation
• does yiannis have a relationship with the audience?
• nice moment of ' do you tell your wife about this?' can be a bigger moment
• idea; during antonio and yiannis speech, could samantha be on stage a glimpse into her life?
• do you need transition between live scene of the two boys and then going into phone scene?
• not sure looking at 2 guys on phone very interesting. Can you find more theatrical moments? at the moment, could this work on radio just as well?
• yiannis shouting really good break to the scene and rhythm. need more of those..
• why is wife to the left? what else can be over there?
• opportunities to play with space a little more. block more spaces into more places around the space.
• idea; what do the characters do when they cannot be seen? eg what does samantha do, what does yiannis do while on phone? this is what the theatrical can do well; juxtapose the text with something much more visual, poetic and metaphoric..
• antonio reading out messages hi... hi.... possible to be recorded by different voices?
• again when you meet, samantha you get annoyed really quickly. great to mirror images that we saw earlier but you do look too annoyed for this to go further. do you like anything about him?
• nose moment lovely but don't overplay it antonio.
• squash again across the space?
• needs to be clearer when the audience are involved adn when not. some of your scenes yiannis and antonio very much to each other.
• is the story of sex with emilia best directed to us?
• lovely scene of the bedroom
• get the synchronisation right exactly in the sense scene. How is Thursday feeling?
• careful of losing sound when looking upwards antonio
• antonio dictin deteriorating late in show.
• the twist needs more time and clarity. what is the subtext? can we see more of it? you are still all three standing like before.
• timing of kids all wrong. play with silences much more and find a more appropriate rhythm.
• why cannot yiannis' character do this? a bit out of the blue....
• smaller clues before hand that dan might fancy him?